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Mirror mirror on the wall,

acting like you know it all.

Comparing every little thing.

Ruling my life like a king.



Mirror mirror on the wall,

making my self-esteem fall and fall.

Telling me things I don't want to hear.

Clouding doubt in my mind that was once clear.



Mirror mirror on the wall,

here I lie, here I sprawl.

Can't you see what you have done?

Making my mind become un-spun.
.Feedback is GREATLY appreciated!

And to everyone who has faved this, THANK YOU!!!
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Charlie0210 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is simply amazing :)
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boo-boo8 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Hobbyist
Thanks so much!
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
So, true and, this is just amazing. I'm speechless. :faint: :heart:
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boo-boo8 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist
Thank you very much :blush:
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome :)
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xXDemonWolfSkullXx Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
Love how you made it truthful! Very creative!
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Morncreek Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Excellent rhyming and imagery. I like how you take the classic couplet from Snow White and twist it on its head. The only aspect that may need improvement is the rhythm of the poem. I think that a consistent or close-to-consistent rhythm would give the poem a little more power; I actually had to stop and re-read the last line of the second stanza before I could continue on.

Overall, definitely a :+fav:.
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boo-boo8 Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist
Ah, that line.
It was originally going to start with "Creating", but that word didn't give the aspect to the poem I needed.

(Thank you so much!)
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eppoif1 Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013
Wonderful composition! :iconclapplz:
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OtakuBloodshed Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Student Writer
Spectacular and creative! I can relate myself to this and I bet many people can to.
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